I'm kinda trying out poetry, improvising, some things, I think it kinda comes out good

here's the second poem I've ever written: http://commet213.deviantart.com/art/I-saw-you-tomorrow-88304375
read the description at the bottom first
the other one is somewhere in my art gallery click on my username (commet) to go to my page, I mostly keep graphic art and photoshop stuff there

kinda feels weird to write this stuff :icon_redf
plz go easy on me, lol :icon_peac

it definitley flowed alright but i think some of the rhymes were just a little weak...
i bet you could do a lot better man...

like with your "captain" references dont hesitate at all just tear that up man.

looking forward to reading future poems.